I am a Year 6 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Ka pai on an amazing post! You’ve written some stellar summer haikus! I particularly enjoyed the fire one, you used some amazing descriptions and I like the images you have included as well! My favourite part of Summer is sitting at the beach and watching as the waves crash up against the shore next to a bonfire. What is your favourite part of Summer?
I noticed that in some places the syllables in each of your lines don’t quite match those required for a haiku poem. Haiku poems can be a little tricky to write because they follow the specific layout of 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, and 5 syllables in the third. But overall poetry is fairly free and doesn’t have many rules so they’re still phenomenal poems.
Perhaps if you wanted to you could go through your poems again and count the syllables you have written in each line, and then re-write each line so that it follows the specific layout for a haiku. An easy way to do so is by clapping each time you make a different sound in a word and counting the number of claps you do! Regardless, I think you should be super proud of the summer poems you have written!
My favourite part of Summer is sitting at the beach and watching as the waves crash up against the shore. What is your favourite part of Summer?
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Kia ora Daisy,
ReplyDeleteIt’s Shannon from the Summer Learning Journey.
Ka pai on an amazing post! You’ve written some stellar summer haikus! I particularly enjoyed the fire one, you used some amazing descriptions and I like the images you have included as well! My favourite part of Summer is sitting at the beach and watching as the waves crash up against the shore next to a bonfire. What is your favourite part of Summer?
I noticed that in some places the syllables in each of your lines don’t quite match those required for a haiku poem. Haiku poems can be a little tricky to write because they follow the specific layout of 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, and 5 syllables in the third. But overall poetry is fairly free and doesn’t have many rules so they’re still phenomenal poems.
Perhaps if you wanted to you could go through your poems again and count the syllables you have written in each line, and then re-write each line so that it follows the specific layout for a haiku. An easy way to do so is by clapping each time you make a different sound in a word and counting the number of claps you do! Regardless, I think you should be super proud of the summer poems you have written!
My favourite part of Summer is sitting at the beach and watching as the waves crash up against the shore. What is your favourite part of Summer?
Happy blogging!
Ka kite anō,
Shannon (SLJ)